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Hit me with your fetid words
Stab me with your poisoned speech
Strip me naked and stake me out for all to see
But you will never break me
Skin me with your hated arrogance
Smash me with your bloody fists
Crucify me before all and stone me
But you will never change me
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I don't know if this is any good, but if you want me to add more, tell me, because otherwise it will be left behind
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~TheChesherCat Nov 22, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
I like the rhythm of this, but for the same reason it bothers me that the third and seventh lines break the rhythm. Would it work better in two stanzas? Broken at "break me / Skin me" of course. I like this poem though, nice work :)
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~thegreatpoetnick119 Nov 23, 2012  Student Writer
im glad you do and thanks for the feedback
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*VertFaere Nov 21, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
You've been through so much and yet you never forget who you are.
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~thegreatpoetnick119 Nov 22, 2012  Student Writer
your referencing to the poem right?
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*VertFaere Nov 22, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Yeah.
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~thegreatpoetnick119 Nov 23, 2012  Student Writer
sorry, you've said it twice in a comment know and i didnt know if i knew you in real life or not
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*VertFaere Nov 23, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
No. I just know the feeling. I faced bullies in school..female ones..which are even worse. Plus I've had to deal with verbal abuse from people close to me. So I can get a pretty good picture of what your talking about.
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~thegreatpoetnick119 Nov 23, 2012  Student Writer
im sorry
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*VertFaere Nov 23, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
It's alright, but thank you. I'm slowly recovering from the Verbal Abuse. I don't know if I could write a poem about it though, that takes major guts.
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~thegreatpoetnick119 Nov 23, 2012  Student Writer
you should try, im sure it would help
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