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I am scard
Both mentally and physically
There are scars all over my body
They are deep and speak of times much worse than these
Each one for a broken hear, a shattered friendship, a forgotten promise
These wounds within my mind
They tear me apart
The bleed and pulse with pain just as much as they day they were wrought upon me
The flower of those i love has now rotted away
Only the petals remain and the float all around me
But i can not touch them
Their they go, blown away in the subtle breeze
Hear me scream
See me burn
Never shall i allow someone to be as beaten and rejected as me
If you feel pain as i do
If you bleed as i do
If you love as i do
If you have been rejected as i have been
Talk to me
I shall help
Even if i must give my life
I must help
I will help
one of my friends wants to commit suicide and i don't know what to do, this keeps happening to me so though i might as well write something related to it, i don't know how it is though so, enjoy
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Strange-Owl Featured By Owner Dec 16, 2011  Hobbyist General Artist
thats so pretty
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thegreatpoetnick119 Featured By Owner Dec 17, 2011  Student Writer
bleh
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savvycoon Featured By Owner Jul 24, 2011  Hobbyist Writer
I hope everything goes okay with your friend! I wish you the best of luck my dear friend <3 I love your poem. I'm glad you're willing to help others with the same thoughts as you. It speaks for your character.
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thegreatpoetnick119 Featured By Owner Jul 24, 2011  Student Writer
thx and rly?
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savvycoon Featured By Owner Jul 28, 2011  Hobbyist Writer
:) Yes yes <3
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thegreatpoetnick119 Featured By Owner Jul 29, 2011  Student Writer
yays
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savvycoon Featured By Owner Jul 29, 2011  Hobbyist Writer
:)
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thegreatpoetnick119 Featured By Owner Aug 5, 2011  Student Writer
lools
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CharlieRoz Featured By Owner Jul 15, 2011  Hobbyist Writer
I really like how you wrote and interpreted this. I hope your friend turns out okay
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thegreatpoetnick119 Featured By Owner Jul 15, 2011  Student Writer
thx you and me to
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Pereyga Featured By Owner Jul 15, 2011  Hobbyist General Artist
what you've written is very sad but amazingly written and aw i was in a similar situation and that's hard -.-
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:iconthegreatpoetnick119:
thegreatpoetnick119 Featured By Owner Jul 15, 2011  Student Writer
thx you and im sry
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:iconpereyga:
Pereyga Featured By Owner Jul 15, 2011  Hobbyist General Artist
you're welcome and no need to feel sorry ^^

i hope your friend will get better
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:iconthegreatpoetnick119:
thegreatpoetnick119 Featured By Owner Jul 15, 2011  Student Writer
yays and same here
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:iconpereyga:
Pereyga Featured By Owner Jul 15, 2011  Hobbyist General Artist
thx
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thegreatpoetnick119 Featured By Owner Jul 15, 2011  Student Writer
yw
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Nightshadow150 Featured By Owner Jul 14, 2011  Hobbyist General Artist
Very well written i felt the emotions that were in it ^^ I hope your friend will think differently and turn away from the edge :hug:
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thegreatpoetnick119 Featured By Owner Jul 15, 2011  Student Writer
thx you and me to and thx for the hug
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:iconnightshadow150:
Nightshadow150 Featured By Owner Jul 16, 2011  Hobbyist General Artist
No prob :D
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:iconthegreatpoetnick119:
thegreatpoetnick119 Featured By Owner Jul 16, 2011  Student Writer
yays
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Nightshadow150 Featured By Owner Jul 18, 2011  Hobbyist General Artist
:iconyaybounceplz:
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thegreatpoetnick119 Featured By Owner Jul 19, 2011  Student Writer
wa
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:iconnightshadow150:
Nightshadow150 Featured By Owner Jul 19, 2011  Hobbyist General Artist
lol
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thegreatpoetnick119 Featured By Owner Jul 19, 2011  Student Writer
how so
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emilyl233 Featured By Owner Jul 14, 2011  Hobbyist Photographer
well written. Very well written.
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thegreatpoetnick119 Featured By Owner Jul 14, 2011  Student Writer
thx you
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Xx-vampire-brat-xX Featured By Owner Jul 14, 2011  Student
thats good and its really sad that ur friend wants to commit suicide i really hope that he/she dont and ill pray
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thegreatpoetnick119 Featured By Owner Jul 14, 2011  Student Writer
kas, and thz
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:iconxx-vampire-brat-xx:
Xx-vampire-brat-xX Featured By Owner Jul 15, 2011  Student
your welcome
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:iconthegreatpoetnick119:
thegreatpoetnick119 Featured By Owner Jul 15, 2011  Student Writer
yays
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Xx-vampire-brat-xX Featured By Owner Jul 18, 2011  Student
:)
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thegreatpoetnick119 Featured By Owner Jul 19, 2011  Student Writer
lols
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:iconxx-vampire-brat-xx:
Xx-vampire-brat-xX Featured By Owner Jul 25, 2011  Student
hows life
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thegreatpoetnick119 Featured By Owner Jul 25, 2011  Student Writer
bad, u
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Pishkin Featured By Owner Jul 14, 2011
I like this. I can really feel it. I especially like how it ended with a sense of hope and reaching out. I seriously felt the words try to touch while I was reading.

The bleed and pulse with pain just as much as they day they were wrought upon me
Should be they. There are other spelling errors too but this one stood out to me.
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thegreatpoetnick119 Featured By Owner Jul 14, 2011  Student Writer
im sry
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Forgetthedetails Featured By Owner Jul 13, 2011
thank you for writing this... I love it. :) its ok, things get better, I promise
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thegreatpoetnick119 Featured By Owner Jul 14, 2011  Student Writer
thx and i hope so
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AmbreeChristineSkye Featured By Owner Jul 13, 2011
This is beautiful except, and i'm sorry if this ticks you off, there are several spelling mistakes. A couple of them repeat. Don't get me wrong I adore the poem but the mistakes detract from the flow of it and distract the reader.
Now; I'm really sorry your friend is considering something so aweful. I've walked a similar edge one to many times and nearly lost a dear freind to it. But he was stronger than his demons and he came back, I can't say if he is compleatly well, but he is still alive and that's what matters. He survived several attempts because he got help. He let others help him. I don't mean to rant at you and I hope I haven't offended you. Truly what people need is someone to listen, That doesn't mean encourage him/her It means try to understand why they think the world is hopeless, try to show them that they are wrong. If it comes to it you should conntact their parents or another adult, there are hotlines and suport groups, many of them anonymous that can help to. You friend isn't alone. Try to make them see that.
Holy crap! I'm sooo sorry! I didn't mean to lecture you, I'm sure you already knew most of this stuff but this is from my experiences and if i can help someone else, I'm willing to risk ticking a few people off. Once again I'm sorry for the rant. And good luck with your friend, I hope they come out of the dark alive.
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thegreatpoetnick119 Featured By Owner Jul 14, 2011  Student Writer
thx you for the advice and no u didnt tick me off
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AmbreeChristineSkye Featured By Owner Jul 20, 2011
Anytime, glad I could help.
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thegreatpoetnick119 Featured By Owner Jul 20, 2011  Student Writer
yays
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NeverEndingMissary Featured By Owner Jul 13, 2011  Student Writer
Talk to your friend. Try and help them the best you can. That or say if they'll do it you will too. I hope you can help your friend. Good luck :)
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thegreatpoetnick119 Featured By Owner Jul 14, 2011  Student Writer
ill try and thx
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NeverEndingMissary Featured By Owner Jul 14, 2011  Student Writer
Your absolutely welcome :)
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thegreatpoetnick119 Featured By Owner Jul 14, 2011  Student Writer
yays
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kds998 Featured By Owner Jul 13, 2011  Student General Artist
im praying for your friend
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thegreatpoetnick119 Featured By Owner Jul 13, 2011  Student Writer
thx
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kds998 Featured By Owner Jul 13, 2011  Student General Artist
no problem
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thegreatpoetnick119 Featured By Owner Jul 13, 2011  Student Writer
yuays
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